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Writing Process
After reading a condensed version of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle's The Sign of Four, I wonder how Doyle created this intelligent detective, known as Sherlock Holmes. Therefore, I gathered excerpts from scholarly texts such as, "Murder Will Out: The Detective in Fiction," Theory and Practice of Classic Detective Fiction, "Racial and Criminal Types," and An Introduction to the Detective Story to support my claim about the impact of Sherlock Holmes during the Victorian Era.
first draft: phenomena of Sherlock Holmes
I focused mainly on the characteristics of Sherlock Holmes in my first draft by using texts from Panek, McBratney, Binyon, and Delamater and Prigozy. moreover, I also focus on connecting the scholarly texts with Doyle's stories such as, The Sign of The Four, A study in scarlet, and a scandal in bohemia. Also, I used the two entries of my forums from week 4 and week 5 as my body paragraphs.
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Revision Plan
One of the most important advice my peers gave me was to have a better topic. They’ve suggested me to change it to “personas of Sherlock Holmes” or “Impact of Sherlock Holmes's,” which suits my claim better. Moreover, I also need to incorporate Sir Arthur Conan Doyle’s text in my paragraphs better and have more analysis of how Doyle’s text supports and relates to my claim from the scholar texts. Overall, I need to pay attention on my inconsistent sentences and verb tenses.
The first priority I will focus on for my revision is to incorporate and relate Sir Arthur Conan Doyle’s text with my topic with more analysis. Therefore, I need to reread Doyle’s examples I used in my essay, then add a few more sentences that present better connections of Doyle’s text with my claim. The second priority I will focus on is to have a better topic that illustrates my essay better. For examples, my peers suggested me to change my topic to “personas of Sherlock Holmes” because it seems less vague than “phenomena of Sherlock Holmes.” Then the third priority I will focus on is to have a different conjunction for the beginning of my conclusion. Because I’ve mentioned my struggle of writing my conclusion, therefore I need to revise my conclusion in order to present end my essay in a better way.
After I’m satisfied with my essay, I will check my grammars again and have a consistent verb tense. In Professor Harrison’s email, he reminds us that we need to have a present tense verb in our essays. Therefore, I’ll have to make sure that my verbs are all in present tense. Then, I will go check my MLA in text citations to see if they are in the correct form. Moreover, I’ll go back to my body paragraphs, and see if there is any vague or board phrases or words that are irrelevant or confusing.
One of the most important advice my peers gave me was to have a better topic. They’ve suggested me to change it to “personas of Sherlock Holmes” or “Impact of Sherlock Holmes's,” which suits my claim better. Moreover, I also need to incorporate Sir Arthur Conan Doyle’s text in my paragraphs better and have more analysis of how Doyle’s text supports and relates to my claim from the scholar texts. Overall, I need to pay attention on my inconsistent sentences and verb tenses.
The first priority I will focus on for my revision is to incorporate and relate Sir Arthur Conan Doyle’s text with my topic with more analysis. Therefore, I need to reread Doyle’s examples I used in my essay, then add a few more sentences that present better connections of Doyle’s text with my claim. The second priority I will focus on is to have a better topic that illustrates my essay better. For examples, my peers suggested me to change my topic to “personas of Sherlock Holmes” because it seems less vague than “phenomena of Sherlock Holmes.” Then the third priority I will focus on is to have a different conjunction for the beginning of my conclusion. Because I’ve mentioned my struggle of writing my conclusion, therefore I need to revise my conclusion in order to present end my essay in a better way.
After I’m satisfied with my essay, I will check my grammars again and have a consistent verb tense. In Professor Harrison’s email, he reminds us that we need to have a present tense verb in our essays. Therefore, I’ll have to make sure that my verbs are all in present tense. Then, I will go check my MLA in text citations to see if they are in the correct form. Moreover, I’ll go back to my body paragraphs, and see if there is any vague or board phrases or words that are irrelevant or confusing.
highlighted revision priorities:
The yellow highlights represents the main concerns of my revisions, whereas the words in red represents multiple mention from my peers and Professor Harrison about word choice and sentence clarity.
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Final draft: Impact of Sherlock Holmes's characteristics
I choose to fully revise this essay because I'm feel more confident in revising literature review essay than revising rhetorical analysis essay. I've focused mainly on making my argument stronger by synthesizing the scholarly sources without overpowered by the experts. then I apply my thoughts of how Sherlock Holmes's characteristics illuminates people of the Victorian era after wars.
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